I'm currently writing book 2 in my Circle saga - which features seven of the sexiest, snarkiest, saddest (some of them) vampires I've ever come across.
The protagonist Claire, tells the story from her point of view and she's different from the other vampires in her Circle. She possesses Enhanced powers which allow her to influence behavior, read minds and now, in this book, share memories - both her own and other Circle members'. These are the first six paragraphs of the book which leaves you in the middle of a shared memory, but you'll get the gist, I hope.
As always, I welcome feedback!
Blood, dark and spicy, was warm in
my mouth, gulped in a frantic rush from Ursula’s throat. Her perfume, a tangy mixture of citrus and
musk, clogged my sinuses, an annoying distraction even her blood couldn't quite
overcome. Why did she have to wear so
goddamn much perfume? Could she not
smell herself? Everyone else could –
from five rooms away.
The bitch
had doused her throat with the shit too.
Christ, I always made sure to avoid my wrists and throat at blood
exchanges. As a courtesy to my vampiric Circle
mates so my stupid perfume wouldn't muddy the taste of my blood.
None of the
men wore cologne on their throats or wrists on meeting nights either. Only goddamn Ursula. Ugh.
Grimacing,
I swallowed another mouthful. One more and that should do it for our blood
exchange this cold, February night. More
of Ursula’s blood rushed into my mouth – blood and something else. No, oh God no, not one of her memories –
***
“Give us a hit, our Jane?” Ursula, young and
mortal, holds out her hand for the rolled joint clutched in the fingers of a
tall, black girl.
The black girl passes it obligingly.
“Ginger’s late.” Her beaded braids click when she turns her head and expels a
lungful of sweet smelling smoke.
Here's a link to Sara's blog where you can read her 6 paragraphs: Sara Walter Ellwood's Sneak Peek Sunday
Here's a link to Sara's blog where you can read her 6 paragraphs: Sara Walter Ellwood's Sneak Peek Sunday
Wow, Amy, great six! I love the deep POV. Spot on.
ReplyDeleteThanks for taking my crazy idea and running with it. I'm going to set up the Linky List in a day or two for next week and I'll email you with the link.
I think it's a great idea, Sara. Just what I need to share pieces of my WIP with people. It's also a great way to make sure I update my blog - especially on a Sunday!
DeleteVery atmospheric with the backdrop, Amy!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy!
DeleteLots of sensory detail going on there!
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